The Flower

Not sure why I wrote this...but it felt right. I think it's one of those metaphor things...*wink*

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Pushing,
Rising,
Growing.

Greeting the fresh air,
Taking in the sun.
Dew drops sticking,
A breeze flutters.

The time has come,
The petals unfurl.
To everyone’s eye,
A thing of grace and beauty.

Young and new,
Vibrant and alive,
Something precious,
Something delicate.

Who would crush it?
Who dare to even touch it?
But there it lies,
Cut,
Beaten,
Trampled.

Is this what humans cause,
Suffering and destruction?
Is this what we enjoy,
Crushing beauty,
Destroying life?

~Zoo
poetry
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top
I like it Shaun, very nice! In many ways kind of like what life is!
Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
I like it Shaun, very nice! In many ways kind of like what life is!


Thanks.

I wrote this...very strangely...it just kind of demanded to be written...I didn't have a clue where I was going with it.


On a side note...I have 20,000 points...which is pretty cool...nowhere near the top, but I'm fairly proud of it.

~Zoo
Galactic Civilizations IV
Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top
This was very good. For me, the rose is a visual metaphor for the beauty and wonder of the Almighty. Viewed with that lens, your poem takes on an even more trenchant hue. I also read this as the flower being a young person - -there are so many possible ways to go with this. Again, very well done.
Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top
Wink?????
What does that mean?
huh?
Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top
Wink?????What does that mean?huh?


Well, that means I know it was a metaphor...but I said, "I think..." and then a wink...to indicate, but not flat out say it. It's subtle....

~Zoo
Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
Again, very well done.


And thank you very much.

~Zoo
Reply #7 from JoeUser Forums Top
whatever you say Shaun
Reply #8 from JoeUser Forums Top

I enjoyed reading this zoo, and am spending quite a bit of time looking at the many different possible meataphors!

Reply #9 from JoeUser Forums Top
On a side note...I have 20,000 points...which is pretty cool...nowhere near the top, but I'm fairly proud of it


Congrats!
Reply #10 from JoeUser Forums Top
Is this what humans cause,
Suffering and destruction?


Who would crush it?
Who dare to even touch it?



One can actually relate it to a lot.Just to think of it, there are so many possibilities, its well written, and very sad.