The Loser

draw

from JoeUser Forums
I showed my hand too fast
aces three of a kind
but I went blind
when you dazzled me with all four sevens.

You smiled like a crocodile
all teeth and predatory leering
and I'm fearing
that I'm not going to get away fast enough from you.

Not a shark
just a lucky hand
understand
that this means nothing in the circle of life.

Not a rebirth, not a death,
Not an arrow in my heart,
just start
to back away slowly now, because I'm on to you.

So don't thrill me with a collection of low numbers
I can count
and you still don't add up
Just shut up and leave me alone.

poetry
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top
Since I'm not the brightest bulb I need to dwell on this one, Nick. Do I see another meaning hiding in there? Nice...
  
Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
Life/love as a card game/gamble is a fun analogy to play around with.


Ha. There is no such thing as an original idea... some stuff just writes itself, though, and this one just flowed out.
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Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top
There is no such thing as an original idea... some stuff just writes itself, though, and this one just flowed out.


Amen. Everything's already been written - we just get to write it with our spin on it . . .

Great piece of writing, Nicky. I liked it a lot
Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top
Well done. Great nimble writing.
Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top
What a nice, concise piece of poetry. I really dig the imagery too.
Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
Definately seems to have another twist it seems to me Joe. Then again, my thinking can be warped sometimes!! I liked the twists and turns Nicky. Nicely done!