The Fire

The blaze burned slowly, its flames seemed to be dying
only a moment ago it was a roaring fire
stoked and tendered
with loving hands
taking turns, adding a log, a bush, a kindling,
here and there, as it crackled with excitement
you could feel the warmth as it blazed
with love and cheerfulness
the flames glowed invitingly

Everyone gathered around feeling the cheerfulness,
and the warmth as it glowed feircely
with pride, it felt good to see the bright flames
beckoning to each other, never forgotten
that specialness, that warmth, that blazed ontowards

Somehow the flame is dying
perhaps from want, lonliness,
one minute a crackle, but
alas no more
without
tendering
the strokes gone
it ebbs

Seeking paper to strengthen its flame
licking the kindling
like a tongue flicking at an ice cream cone
hungrily, oh no
it fell, gone just like that
nothing, just an empty shell
the fire dies, a natural death
too tired to continue burning of its own accord
without stoking, tendering,
it........
dies



[All rights reserved by Donna aka ForeverSerenity]
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Reply #1 Top
the poem - warm, sad and flowing - like the fire

thanks
Reply #2 Top
Nice imagery, and I felt sorry for the dying fire.


I agree with Whip, FS! Nice   
Reply #3 Top
I enjoyed this, FS. Nice imagery, and I felt sorry for the dying fire.


Thx Whip! BTW..I joined that poetry website, it seems a bit daunting but I'll see how it goes! Thx for the link!


the poem - warm, sad and flowing - like the firethanks


Thx Dr. D! Yes, it was.....




Nice imagery, and I felt sorry for the dying fire.



I agree with Whip, FS! Nice



Thx Joe!
Reply #4 Top
This could almost be an analogy for life or love or music or creation.

Well done, Donna, I really liked it.
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Reply By: dynamasoPosted: Monday, February 12, 2007This could almost be an analogy for life or love or music or creation.


Exactly, for anything!


Well done, Donna, I really liked it.


Thx Mark!
Reply #6 Top
Very well written. I kept expecting some kind of twist, but I realized that was the wrong way to read it. So, I read it and it was perfectly realized. Good job! Thanks for sharing. - Moskowitz
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Very well written.


Thanks for sharing


You're welcome Mr. Moskowitz!


I kept expecting some kind of twist, but I realized that was the wrong way to read it. So, I read it and it was perfectly realized.


Oh yeah, there could have been! But I kept it simple! : )