UNDER AND ABOVE

I wrote this after last Sunday's incident a bus. I don't really believe this of my city, but I think it is true, in some respects, of every city. It seems to me the more closer we live together, the harder it is for us to live together.

Underneath, there is a fluid
Running through the soil and sandstone
Blood dark and rich with tales
Buried deep and weighed down with buildings

Above, roads and footpaths, the gardens and parks
Are this city’s epidermis, its thick skin
Waiting for the needles of progress
To pierce it and draw the hidden secrets out

Underneath, there is staunched growth
Wrapped up tight by the weeds
Of services deemed essential
Cables, wires, sewer pipes and fibre optics

Above, we’re the living remnants
Of the heroes who made this place a city
Weakened by modern excess
We seem incapable of continuing their good work

Underneath, there is a mordant smell
Seeping up like flatulence from the disturbed earth
It rises above the city lines
And hangs in the sky like a putrescent smog

Above, edifices like melanomas on the landscape
Spread and stain the hills and valleys
Leak sickness into rivers and oceans
The only life is the diseases we’ve introduced

We don’t erect statues to our heroes anymore
Instead, we build malls and car parks,
We let heritage be remodelled in apartments
To suit gallery viewing and short attention spans

Under and above, it is all the same
We lie awake at night listening to the sirens of trouble
Scream past and beyond to the fire
And silently give thanks the sirens aren't coming for us

This time...
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Reply #1 Top

ooooo, Maso.  I really liked this.

Especially this part..

Leak sickness into rivers and oceans
The only life is the diseases we’ve introduced

We don’t erect statues to our heroes anymore
Instead, we build malls and car parks,
We let heritage be remodelled in apartments
To suit gallery viewing and short attention spans

I think the fact this event disturbed you enough to be prolific about it....shows a lot about who you are.

And who you are...is very good to see.

Reply #2 Top
Beautiful. And very, very melancholic. I'm with Tova; this was one wonderful piece of writing.

Man, you are gushing goodness these days!
Reply #3 Top
I liked this as well!


This part resonated:

"Under and above, it is all the same
We lie awake at night listening to the sirens of trouble
Scream past and beyond to the fire
And silently give thanks the sirens aren't coming for us

This time..."
Reply #4 Top
Tova,

I really liked this


Wow, and I know you're not a poetry fan.

very good to see


Back at you, mate. Thanks for the continued support.

San Chonino,

this was one wonderful piece of writing


Thanks mate. I guess I'm on a bit of a roll. My muse just won't let up at the moment. I am gratefully a slave to her whims, though.

Serenity,

I liked this as well


Thanks very much to you for your continued support too. It is very much appreciated.
Reply #6 Top
Shovel,

Excellent Maso as usual


Thanks a lot, mate. This means a great deal to me, coming from you.

Incidentally, I love your new avatar, mate. Very... you
Reply #7 Top
Very well done, my friend. This bears repeated readings. Thanks
Reply #8 Top
Buddah,

Very well done


Ah, validation, sweet, sweet validation. To paraphrase Homer Simpson: "...is there anything it can't do?"

Thanks


No, thank YOU. I am so enjoying your book and am finding it particularly inspirational.
Reply #9 Top
Mark,

Who knew from an ugly event something beautiful would come out. Very good, mate.
Reply #10 Top
Chris,

Very good, mate


Thanks heaps, mate.
Reply #11 Top
Maso,
I am a make lemonade out of lemons type girl. This is fabulous. Out of something ugly, you made something beautiful.

Underneath, there is a fluid
Running through the soil and sandstone
Blood dark and rich with tales
Buried deep and weighed down with buildings

I liked this part the most. It was very visual for me.

Killer dude!
Reply #12 Top
Kelly,

I am a make lemonade out of lemons type girl


I knew there was something about you I really liked. I am the same (except I'm not a girl, of course).

Killer dude!


Thanks very much. Glad you liked it and good to see you too.
Reply #13 Top
i really do like this
Reply #14 Top
Ennarath,

i really do like this


Thank you very much and welcome to JU. Hope you stick around and write some more. Watch out for JU Writers Club articles. If you feel inspired by the next suggestion, you're more than welcome to join in.
Reply #15 Top
Out of something ugly, you made something beautiful.


I agree.

This is definitely "wow" worthy.
Reply #16 Top
Tex,

This is definitely "wow" worthy


Thanks so much. Nice to see you.