The Key Already Found

just something I had to write for Conkel's class

from JoeUser Forums
Life is like a bowl of chicken noodle soup
The chicken represents people
And the noodles are the obstacles in life
The chicken just floats around in the broth,
Trying to find its way around each noodle.

Sometimes you're the elephant in life
The one that's all talk and no show
You're the one who's really afraid of the mouse
The elephant that backs down from a challenge

Your friends are your umbrella
They pop up when the rain comes pouring down
Your umbrella is your protectant against the harshest storms
Even the lightening storms that shock your emotions

A somebody that's always near by
She's always by your side
No matter where you go
She's your shadow
She's the one you can share
All your life stories with
You know she'd never tell a soul

Just when you thought you found the key to life,
You think back to all the things in your life
Then you realize that you already
Had the key to life before you ever found it

~carebear~
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top
Damn! People finally decide post something and nobody bothers to comment. And people bitch about nobody being on here anymore........oh well I guess the bitching really didn't mean anything. I dunno. Maybe I shouldn't give a fuck anymore................maybe it's what everyone that was on here has said to this place.

Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
well, i thought it was pretty awesome Ashley. You should post more on here... your writing is thought-provoking...

~Liv
Siege of Centauri
Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top
Ok, so kind of random first reply but whatever.

I seriously think you need to go ahead and scrap this bad boy and try again. You shouldn't have to explain yourself that much with your poetry. Your readers can hopefully put 2 and 2 together.

By the way, I like the premise. It's a nice piece, it just needs some work.
Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top
Thanks Liv. It's one of the many reasons I don't post on here anymore. No one even bothers with it.

Alex~ Heh....try again? I probably won't bother. lol. I haven't really written anything good in a while that'd be worth posting on here. Most of the things I have written aren't very nice either. I love you to death Alex, but I just hate how your poems are so much better! I'm so jealous! lol I just wish I could write things that were as good as yours.

~carebear~