interview with intimacy

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"well, you can’t blame me ... ”
spits the lust at the intent
“ ... i may have done it, but it’s only what YOU meant”


“then, you can’t blame me ...“
says the action to the guilt
“ ... i'm the one that made it, but YOU ordered it built”


“well, it wasn’t me ... ”
shouts i think towards i feel
“ ... i was only asking, but YOU had to make it real”


“well, it’s not OUR fault ... ”
whispers consequence to shame
“ ... we tried so hard to tell them, still it's us who bears the blame”
art
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Reply #1 from JoeUser Forums Top
Wow! This is EXCELLENT!

You can sure say a lot with just a few words, very impressive.

Thanks for sharing,
Cathy
Reply #2 from JoeUser Forums Top
Wow. I'm not usually into poetry, but I liked this piece. Maybe it was the unusual layout. Well done.

-- B
Galactic Civilizations III
Reply #3 from JoeUser Forums Top
You can sure say a lot with just a few words, very impressive.

Thanks for sharing,
Cathy


thanks so much, cathy. i'm glad you enjoyed it. and nice to "meet" you


Wow. I'm not usually into poetry, but I liked this piece. Maybe it was the unusual layout. Well done


mr_frog, i've been trying to break my bad habit of writing poems in a standard sort of layout, so i am very pleased to have had this comment from you, as i had wondered if it would "read" well written that way. thanks for the feedback, and i'm very glad you liked it


mig XX
Reply #4 from JoeUser Forums Top
Miggggg, ok can I just say WOW, I don't have anything constructive to say at all, but as I said when I think WOW, I will show my appreciation to the author, which is my lovely blog Mummy, so lots of appreciation coming your way!

as i had wondered if it would "read" well written that way


Mig one of the things I completely adore about your writing, is the way you lay out what you say, not only does it make it flow perfectly, and make it a complete pleasure to read, but it's your own style, I don't need to see your name on your work, because I can tell from the style it's you, and you're all style baby! Keep the poetry coming, educate me on the fine art!
Reply #5 from JoeUser Forums Top
but as I said when I think WOW, I will show my appreciation to the author, which is my lovely blog Mummy, so lots of appreciation coming your way!


thankyou sal. what a lovely compliment. i'm very glad you liked it so much, i really am. this one was really hard to get out !. it looks so simple but it almost drove me demented hehe !.

thanks again for all your luuuurve, you funky little chickie, you

mumsy mig XX
Reply #6 from JoeUser Forums Top
Mig! I love this, it's genius. I love how neat and concise it is, and how clever.

*worships at alter of Mig*


Thanks for this! You really are a ridiculously talented woman.

Love DYl xx
Reply #7 from JoeUser Forums Top

thanks so much, dyl. i'm glad you liked it. it was hard to keep it that short, so im glad you liked the neatness, i was aiming for that


*worships at alter of Mig*


hehe now that i can handle


mig XX
Reply #8 from JoeUser Forums Top

“well, it wasn’t me ... ”
shouts i think towards i feel
“ ... i was only asking, but YOU had to make it real”


That's a great line Mig, as usual I'm impressed and in awe of your way with words and emotions.

Reply #9 from JoeUser Forums Top
Being a minimalist by nature this work really appeals to me. As others have said you have managed to express so much with so little.

Great work, and thanks for sharing.
Reply #10 from JoeUser Forums Top
Simply amazing. Great work
Reply #11 from JoeUser Forums Top

That's a great line Mig, as usual I'm impressed and in awe of your way with words and emotions


thanks, carlos. (i decided i'd use your name sometimes ). i wish i was as as "under control" as this poem


Being a minimalist by nature this work really appeals to me. As others have said you have managed to express so much with so little.


cs guy, i too like to think of myself as minimalistic with words, and though i rarely succeed to cut out the superfluosity, i am always pleased when i can ... AND when it gets noticed. thankyou


Simply amazing. Great work


thanks m-post. it's hard to overstate how much i appreciate this feedback. the world is so busy and it always gives me such a boost when somebody makes time to read my stuff. i'm very glad you enjoyed it, and i'm very grateful for your saying so. thankyou


mig XX
Reply #13 from JoeUser Forums Top
This is fucking amazing mig (damn I suck at commenting on poems)


macky, you don't. you don't !. this is a great comment. it's exactly the kind of reaction i like. i'm sort of relieved that you said that actually, cause i think that about some of your stuff, and then i write this nice flowery comment instead, in case it sounds vulgar. (prepare for future vulgar comments heh)


Bravo! My own poems tend to be overly wordy, like im afraid that people wont "get them" if i dont write in a literal sense


oh, little_whip, your poems are art. i'm planning to re-read your "handful of misc poems" over and over. they stir such a range of emotions. funny, i don't find you too wordy at all. heh. i just sit there going "ahhhh, lovely, mmm"


mig XXX


ps: little_whip and macky, if you come back and see this, i wondered if you read each others' work ?. (i can't remember from comments). 'cause i think that you would enjoy each others poems but you post at vastly different times, so i'm not sure if you each see the others' stuff ... i'm blabbing hehe ... you get the idea
Reply #15 from JoeUser Forums Top

Reply By: ShitsNgiggles ...this be da bomb diggity, yo


stePHen, thankyou. you rock my world with your happy attitude, my friend


mig XX