oh god, its real criticism! thank you.
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i enjoyed it, and this type of story isnt my cup of tea. my only complaint is that you dont establish where they are in the beginning. and the only reason to not tell the reader where the characters are is if it will be revealed later and that gets the reader to read more, but that wasnt the case. i think the confusing beginning takes away from the piece as a whole. clarify that and youve got a nice short story on your hands.
this is the beginning (though i dont have more yet) to something longer. ive been told the beginning of the beginning is a bit long. tell me what you think. (there may be some typos. whatever sounds cooler, thats what i meant to write.) ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- The third
the country as a whole is wealthy but we have a huge gap between the rich and the poor. the middle class is shrinking. i think the stat is something to the effect of: the top 5% has 50% of the wealth and the other 95% of the US has the other 50%. itll never be equal, cause that goes against the whole fact someone makes more than others. but that is a huge gap.
hehe, nice. ill try to host the pictures myself in a bit and see if that helps.
check out the link that shows some really neat pictures that i think make more of a point that the freemasons had a hand in designing washington d.c. than ideas that there is a pentagram in the road layout. i had a college history professor that pointed this out so how cool is that? and the main places in the pyramid are main places in D.C. so how ca
Not to by any means denigrate or play down the importance of the Columbine shootings, but this tragic event would have never have received the same publicity had it taken place in, say, Rwanda. Or Israel. Or Australia, for that matter. hell, in the US we only focused on it because it was white upper mi
alright. i guess its my turn to weigh in. as one of the founding members of the LTM (one of the elite 5 -- the name was taken from pokemon with its elite 4 -- now you now serious we take ourselves), i want to thank you for writing the ltm into your article. it is the perfect counterpart to the columbine incident. a couple things that dont effect the article much but were mentioned wrong by you or someone responding: they did it in april (i know, c
for being such a "troll" i think you'll be a great addition to the loser turd mafia forums. thanks for joining. now you better post!
thanks. this is what im saying! hehe.
i heard somewhere that the number one write in vote (i dont know if you can for president, though) in the US is gilligan. and you know what? i would vote for the professor. yes, everything would be made from coconuts, but we'd have a radio and huts. and dont we already have gilligan (bush) in office with the captain too (cheney). i can see cheney hitting bush with his hat right now.
Adolph Hitler's mother seriously considered having an abortion, but was talked out of it by her doctor. yet another reason im pro-choice.
Fuzz. “How much does it cost? Fifty dollars? No! Forty dollars? No! If you call within the next six minutes it’s only...” “And four, and three, and two more, and...” Fuzz. Fuzz. Test signal. Click. I sleep. I wake up in my lavish hovel. Stepping out of bed only to knock my shin into the “kitchen” table. Bottles rattle.
In two hours of walking I haven’t made a single decision. Possibly because it’s been snowing, possibly because its sleeting as well, but probably because I’ve only got on a robe and slipper socks. I hate slipper socks. The old commercials were right. These damned things were always a gift. No one ever bought them for himself. That’s because they’re shit. They’r
it's raining. it's raining a lot. but the biggest thing to grab my attention isnt the down poor. it's the extremely poor drainage. towns (especially where i am, downtown) are planned out and made according to the needs for the town. things like traffic, WEATHER, and a number of other things factor into how and where streets are built. and even with older roads t
ive seen a commercial on tv here for red bull energy drink and they try to do an british accent and they say something about whingers. and they pronounce it wit hthe hard "g" sound. is that the british way or the advertising company's just stupid?
because i am. and hunter s thompson is a sleazy character himself. so once i start writing stuff about drug fueled road trips and killing shit then you are good to go.
its just a short short i wrote. but i guess that ill take that as a compliment if it made you feel that way. thanks.
We traveled from town to town, driving hours at a time. Sometimes days would pass without any news of our misadventures. Jen loved getting every county paper with news of the bank and bakery robberies. She referred to it as the "bankery" robbery. Only she found her word play funny. It was too serious of an issue for me to joke about, let alone discuss in public. <
mig tells me that i am the US equivalent of you, so let's see how "troll" i can get. to prove your point about how people think you are more "troll" than you truely are, my best friend's first memory of me is me calling him fat in high school. good times for all. wanna hold hands?
...so I make little baby moans. He likes that. He swivels his hips counter-clockwise. He always does. I wish I wouldn't have shaved a few days ago. The hair is growing back and his pelvis is grinding into the stubble, making it burn. I still don’t understand this man’s desire to have my crotch look like a twelve-year-old’s. It won't be much longer; maybe another minut
I mean, come on people, if you are physically unable to do something, don't do it! Thems the breaks is all. I'm sorry you can't play baseball because you are blind. It's very unfortunate that you can't walk without legs or a torso to attach fake ones to. I cry nightly thinking of all the people that are denied a job as principal at your local high school just beca